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People living in large cities face a number of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems in cities and how can these problems be tackled?

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Urban inhabitants suffer from some issues in their life. These challenges are caused by some factors, and it should be dealt with by some effective solutions. People living in cities are struggling with many concerning challenges, chief among them are polluted air and overcrowding. Urban citizens face these undesirable conditions because they can easily catch sight of private cars on the streets and immigration of individuals flocking to large cities. Perhaps the main reason for which people prefer to drive private cars is the convenience it brings. Better amenities are available in terms of medical, education, security and employment in big cities. The implication of these facilities is that immigrants settle over there and those places become overpopulated. Overpopulation in turn can take a detrimental toll on people’s
life
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life, such
such
 as rising living costs. But what measures can be implemented to cope with problems of living in large cities? The less fossil
fuels we
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fuels, we
 consume, the better we are doing to reduce air pollution and mitigate detrimental impacts of
this
 issue, take respiratory diseases
such
 as asthma, as a salient example. To reach
this
goal we
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goal, we
 should utilize eco-friendly modes of transportation
such
 as buses or tubes which release less pollutants into the air. By doing
this
, our cities will be a worth-living place and urban citizens will be healthy. Strict measures
such
 as high taxes should be imposed on people who immigrate from less developed areas to cities in order to deter them and curb the issue of accumulation of the population in cities. To conclude, the above-mentioned remedies can certainly tackle the problems of living in big cities which citizens
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 in
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 daily life.
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