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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays, travelling to difficult conditions locations
such
 as Sahara deserts or the Antartic become more trending to many people around the world. Visiting these places can have both pros and cons for the visitors. On one side, it’s life’s opportunity
to
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for
 challenges themselves
for
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to
 the visitors. They can reach the dream of reaching
faraway
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far away
 places which they had read in the books of the childhood. As the transportation becoming more convenient and at
more reasonable
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most reasonable
 price, going to these places becomes more feasible and gives fruitful experience than popular places for tourism.
For instance
, visiting Antartic to see
penguin
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penguins
a penguin
the penguin
 and extreme cold weather can be and fantastic and achievable by flying to South Africa and taking the special ship to
there
objective case of they
them
their
. On the other side, travelling to
such
 difficult condition places is costly and dangerous. The total cost of preparation for special equipments, travelling and tour guide could be very expensive to average income. Many of these tools
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are
 compulsory to secure your life in these
places but
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places, but
 couldn’t be used in daily life.
Moreover
, your health should be in
very good situation
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a very good situation
very good situations
 before participating in the trip. If not, you will have trouble and put your life at risk.
For example
, visiting Everest in Nepal requires very strong heart and ability to breath in low-pressure and cold air. If you have some breathing’s problem, you couldn’t walk in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 mountain and emergency contact could not support you. In conclusions, travelling to hard condition places is
become
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becoming
 more popular today. It can give some
advantages but
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advantages, but
also
 have some drawbacks. It’s important to understand your needs and select suitable options.

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