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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and explain from your own knowledge or experience.

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I disagree with the statement that government should spend more money on
railways
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the railways
 than roads. Every
year thousands
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year, thousands
 of people die in
road
 accidents. The number of people dying due to existing railway condition
are
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is
 very less.
Road
 accidents are caused due to many reasons like, drivers not following traffic rules, over-speeding, etc. But the main reason, and the most avoidable reason is potholes. Potholes cause 80% of all
road
 accidents in India. Most of the roads in India have potholes. Civilians are so frustrated with the
numbee
the property possessed by a sum or total or indefinite quantity of units or individuals
number
 potholes that a man dressed from Bangalore dresses up in
space suit
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space suits
a space suit
 and pretended to be on
moon
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the moon
 while walking on a
road
 filled with potholes.
Beisdes
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Besides
 potholes, there are have been cases where the
road
 collapsed due to weak structure and heavy rains. In India,
roads
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the roads
 are made to
last
 just one
spout
catch sight of
spot
 of rain in monsoons. In a country prone to malaria and dengue,
pothles
a pit or hole produced by wear or weathering (especially in a road surface)
potholes
 cause
much
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many
 health issues along with safety on
road
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the road
roads
. We
also
 need to invest more on roads than railways to provide better connectivity to remote villages. Well built roads that
last
 decades will be much more economical than
buliding
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
 railway lines
t
in the direction of
to
 remote villages.
This
 will remove the headache of operating and
maintianing
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintaining
mentioning
 costs of railway stations from the government. Connectivity through roads will provide people living in far off place a better life and expose them to more
oppotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. In conclusion, government should spend more money on roads than railways as roads reduce the number of accidents and improve connectivity to remote villages.

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