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The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in the Western Cape between 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in the Western Cape between 2000 and 2010.
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The graph below describes the variations
of
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 gross domestic product (
GDP
) in the Western Cape from 2000
till
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to
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 2010.
Overall
, the
GDP
 was growing steadily between 2000 and 2007, but it decreased suddenly after 2007 and increased in 2009. In 2000, the
GDP
 growth was 4%, and it had been changing slowly for 3 years before it increased suddenly from 2003
till
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 2004. The
GDP
 increased
around
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 6%, and it remained
in
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 around that percentage between 2004 and 2007. The
GDP
 suddenly experienced a decrease from 2007 until it reached to lowest rate - 1.5% in 2009.
This
suddenly
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 reduction caused
that
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 Western Cape
list
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 a lot of money in that 2 years. The
GDP
have
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 been rising since 2009. It reached 2.5% and remained
in
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there in 2010.
To sum up
, the
GDP
 of
Western
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 Cape experienced three huge
change
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that
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two is
increase
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an increase
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 change and one
is
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apply
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decrease
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a decrease
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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