Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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People pay a large sum of money in the form of the taxes to the government.

This

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money is spent on various departments according to the budget passed by parliament.Some people believe the amount spent on the arts should be spent on other projects.I do agree with the statement and

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will represent my essay with reasonable examples.

Firstly

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if we talk about economy as we are

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third world country

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a third world country

and we have to get loans from many countries in order to cope with

requirements

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the requirements

.As we are borrowing from another

country it

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country, it

should be the priority of our government to spend cash carefully.We should probably use it for educational prospective as we are having a numerous

illetracy

ignorance resulting from not reading

illiteracy

rate so it is best to spend on the inauguration of some new schools and universities in order to provide standard education.

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we can spend funds on improving health or development of cities.Public transport and roads play a vital role in business and

therefore

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they can

also

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be considered.Our country is basically agricultural so

this

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could be spent on providing subsidies to the farmers and flourish our economy.

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it is wrong to say that all the finances should be given up for other projects.The arts have an essential place in our lives and we depend on it.The art represents our cultures and traditions. TO sum up

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it would be right to say that some could be deducted from

arts budget

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the arts budget

in order to deal with

economic crisis

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the economic crisis

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

241 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
needs of the majority

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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Art classes such as painting drawing, are one important a child's developement as other subjects, so it should be compulosry in igh schools. To what extent to do agree or disagree?

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

in some countries ,it is illegal for company to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negotive development ?

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.Why might this be the case?Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?