Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

People pay a large sum of money in the form of the taxes to the government.
This
money is spent on various departments according to the budget passed by parliament.Some people believe the amount spent on the arts should be spent on other projects.I do agree with the statement and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will represent my essay with reasonable examples.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
if we talk about economy as we are
third world country
Suggestion
a third world country
and we have to get loans from many countries in order to cope with
requirements
Suggestion
the requirements
.As we are borrowing from another
country it
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country, it
should be the priority of our government to spend cash carefully.We should probably use it for educational prospective as we are having a numerous
illetracy
ignorance resulting from not reading
illiteracy
rate so it is best to spend on the inauguration of some new schools and universities in order to provide standard education.
Furthermore
,
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,
we can spend funds on improving health or development of cities.Public transport and roads play a vital role in business and
therefore
they can
also
be considered.Our country is basically agricultural so
this
could be spent on providing subsidies to the farmers and flourish our economy.
However
,
Accept space
,
it is wrong to say that all the finances should be given up for other projects.The arts have an essential place in our lives and we depend on it.The art represents our cultures and traditions. TO sum up
,
Accept space
,
it would be right to say that some could be deducted from
arts budget
Suggestion
the arts budget
in order to deal with
economic crisis
Suggestion
the economic crisis
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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