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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than it's advantages . Do agree or disagree ?

#people #car
There has been a tremendous increase in the number of cars over the
last
 few decades and
this
 development has significantly affected the lifestyle of people. The biggest advantage of having a
car
 is that people can go wherever they want whenever they are ready.
However
, some argue that the huge number of cars has critically impacted the human beings in a negative way. I do not quite agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, cars have an equal number of merits and demerits. People who are
objected
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objecting
 to having a
car
 assert that the cars can deteriorate
air quality
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the air quality
. Too many cars
also
 cause traffic congestion in cities. Most cars are driven by fossil
fuels which
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fuels, which
 emit harmful gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide. Even though scientists are trying to develop eco-friendly fuels, those technologies are still in the nascent stage and they may take many more decades to be available.
Nowadays in
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Nowadays, in
 Seoul, Korea, the quality of air is so bad that wearing a mask is mandatory to maintain one’s health. On the flip side,
cars
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the cars
also
 offer various benefits. They have made commuting easier.
Cars
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Cats
 are particularly helpful in emergencies where getting to the destination in the least possible time is of utmost importance.
In addition
, the
car
 industry generates many jobs and boosts the national economy. To sum up, there are merits and demerits to owning a
car
. In my opinion, cars have become an indispensable part of our
lives
Suggestion
life
.
However
, we should bear in mind that overuse of cars will harm our environment. But we should bear in mind that our nature will be destroyed if we overuse the
car
. We should control the usage of the
car
 for protecting our environment for the
next
 generation

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