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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
In our modern age international trading is
easy as it never
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never as easy as it
 was before,
therefore
 we can find a variety of foods from all over the world on the grocery store shelves.
Although
 some people think that every
country
 should produce all needed
food
 for their citizens within a
country
, I am sure that some types of products are literally impossible to be made or found without importing from other countries or at least it is not cost effective.
First
 of all, some products for foods are simply inaccessible in some
countries while
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countries, while
 in other countries that products are laying under the
foots
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feet
. It well known that
geographical location
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the geographical location
 of the
country
 defines its main type of
food
.
For
example in
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example, in
 coastal
countries seafood
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countries, seafood
 is
main and cheapest product
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a main and cheapest product
, while in
country
 like Kyrgyzstan, where you can reach the closest sea coast after passing minimum two countries, seafood is really is a treasure.
Thus
, for some countries it is the best solution in economic aspect to
import
 some types of
food
 from other countries.
Secondly
, if any
country
 is losing economically from
continuous
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the continuous import
import
 of
food
, the best way to compensate it is to export other type of
food
,
instead
 of cutting
food
 imports and leave people without some crucial
food
 ingredients. Any
country
 that has to buy something from other countries definitely can find what to propose in its own turn.
For example
,
country
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a country
 like Kazakhstan which has a vast expanses of fertile land and pastures can export corns and beef to some countries like Japan and
import
 seafood from them
instead
.
Indeed it
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Indeed, it
 is undeniable that it is better to export abundant products rather than waste it aimlessly and
import
 needed products than suffering from of its deficits. In conclusion, undoubtedly clear that in economic aspects any for any
country
 is better to get some
food
 from other countries rather than trying to grow or produce that
food
, as it can be technically difficult or too expensive to do it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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