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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #children #homework #school
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Homework
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 has always been an integral part of education.
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 some people are in favour and others are against children being given
homework
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 every day. Many people are of opinion that daily
homework
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 is
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 for children. They are bound indoors and spent all evening finishing their work. Physical activity is equally important for body and mind development. Sport keep a person active and agile and is as equally important as
study
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studying
. Other extracurricular activities like taking part in debates should be encouraged in
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school which
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school, which
 helps brain to think
,
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,
grow and make
person
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people
the person
a person
 creative. Daily
homework
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make
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makes
is making
children
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child's
child
life
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 boring and should be
discourged
made less hopeful or enthusiastic
discouraged
 at
school
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.
Accept space
.
 Whereas stress should be placed on
school
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 administration to make children be involved in different activities so as to make their
life
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 interesting and purposeful. There are certain
peope
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 who think daily
homework
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 is very important. Children should be doing
homework
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 everyday.
This
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 makes them learn their subject well. It not only makes them successful at
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school but
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school, but
 in
life
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. If they do daily
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homework they
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homework, they
 will have better retention power of what they studied and reproduce well in exam. Which
offcourse
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off course
 will help them in future
life
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 to admission in good colleges and universities. Their success at
school
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 will make their parents feel proud of them in society. Success in
school
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life
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 is related to
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
 in later
life
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. Better job, better earning and good standard of living. For them success at
school
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 means success in every sphere of
life
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. In my opinion
homework
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 is necessary as it keeps you in contact with books when you come back from
school
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. It acts as a sort of check that you are studying. But
on the other hand
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 extracurricular activities are equally important. Children should
also
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 take part in sports. Overall the
school
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 administration
need
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needs
 to strike a balance
betwen
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
 body and mind development.
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Therefore
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Therefore, instead
instead
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 of every day of
homework
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, few
day
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days
 should be kept off for children to relax and play.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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