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Life has changed in a better state in the past 100 years. What is your opinion about it?

#life #years
Nowadays there is a huge debate between
people whether
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people, whether
 life has moved
to
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in
 a different way to be easier or not.
However
,
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,
I am totally convinced that we live in a better situation than before because a lot of changes had been
occurred
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occurring
to
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in
 our lives
such
 as technology and mobile phone which enable people to live easier and
this
 will be explained below in the following essay. To start with, there are many reasons for having easier live
;
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;
 laptops and computers made our world
small
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smaller
 and enable citizens all over the world to live in one small village
.
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.
For example
, being a citizen in a small country is not a big dilemma because it is easily people can be connected together even they are in
isolated place
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an isolated place
isolated places
as a result
 people will be communicated all the time.
In addition
 to
this
,
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,
 a lot of inventions had been launched to make many fields better
such
 as using technology in education and health sector leads to a revolution in hospitals and are linked to save people’s lives.
Furthermore
, in ancestor’s time there was not any facilities
such
 as transportation
,
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,
 it was very difficult to move or travel from place to
another but
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another, but
 now there is a diversity in means of transportation which help people to travel and gain new experiences in work and education
this
 is why we live in a perfect time which has an availability in many sectors
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 In conclusion, It is clear to me that life now presents many opportunities to youngsters and youth to enhance their power in a useful issue utilizing the facilities that are available to them because in today's world life is easier than before because of technology and new inventions
.
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