Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problem does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

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is facing challenges and problem throughout his life and one of the
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problems
for both senior citizens and youth of
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the solution
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due to the increasing
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population, everybody
is facing
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challenges, especially
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where competition between two distinct
age
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groups evolve the lots of problems
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due to
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the high number
of applicants most of the deserving
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people
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job
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the job
a job
jobs
. Which leads to depression or some of the people get mentally disturbed. Delving
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as per the above mentioned points it may be harmful for our upcoming generation to survive in
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To tackle
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goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
must put a criteria of
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in
both these
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group peoples for a particular
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so that no one left in
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The next thing
to be done is to put a retirement
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for
elder ones
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the elder ones
with a good amount of pension by which competition between them
automatically get
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automatically gets
decline and every person gets his
job
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that he/ she want.
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Collectively, I
Collectively I
want to say both
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groups
of peoples have
thier
of them or themselves
their
own needs which can be
fulfill
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fulfilled
through
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job
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the job
so from my point of view government must pay close attention
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