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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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the
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data about the underground
railway
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systems
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 in different cities.
According to
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 the table, the oldest underground
railway
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 system is opened in London and covers the longest
railway
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.
On the other hand
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, Los Angeles is the latest as it opened in 2001 and
also
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 covers the
second
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 least length of
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railway
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the railway
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.
Furthermore
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, most people are using the
railway
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systems
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 in Tokyo. There provides 1927 million passengers per year.
Whereas
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 in Kyoto, the
railway
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systems
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 provide the fewest number of passengers with 45 million per year. These two cities
also
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 have more than 100km gap in
length
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the length
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 of
route
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the route
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.
Although
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 Tokyo
railway
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systems
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 are older than other
one
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, they are
using
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 by users frequently.
Therefore
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,
London
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the London
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railway
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systems
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 are the oldest and
also
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are
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the longest length of
route
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the route
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 in these cities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, systems with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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