The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The form shows
the
data about the underground Correct article usage
apply
railway
systems
in different cities.
According to
the table, the oldest underground railway
system is opened in London and covers the longest railway
. On the other hand
, Los Angeles is the latest as it opened in 2001 and also
covers the second
least length of railway
.
Add an article
the railway
Furthermore
, most people are using the railway
systems
in Tokyo. There provides 1927 million passengers per year. Whereas
in Kyoto, the railway
systems
provide the fewest number of passengers with 45 million per year. These two cities also
have more than 100km gap in length
of Correct article usage
the length
route
. Add an article
the route
Although
Tokyo railway
systems
are older than other one
, they are Correct pronoun usage
ones
using
by users frequently.
Wrong verb form
used
Therefore
, London
Correct article usage
the London
railway
systems
are the oldest and also
are
the longest length of Unnecessary verb
apply
route
in these cities.Add an article
the route
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