The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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data about the underground
railway
systems
in different cities.
According to
the table, the oldest underground
railway
system is opened in London and covers the longest
railway
.
On the other hand
, Los Angeles is the latest as it opened in 2001 and
also
covers the
second
least length of
railway
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.
Furthermore
, most people are using the
railway
systems
in Tokyo. There provides 1927 million passengers per year.
Whereas
in Kyoto, the
railway
systems
provide the fewest number of passengers with 45 million per year. These two cities
also
have more than 100km gap in
length
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of
route
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the route
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.
Although
Tokyo
railway
systems
are older than other
one
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, they are
using
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by users frequently.
Therefore
,
London
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railway
systems
are the oldest and
also
are
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the longest length of
route
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in these cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, systems with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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