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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The table provided gives information on the underground
railway
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 systems in terms of the routes covered,
passengers
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 travelling annually and the year the
railway
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 system was initiated. The indicated information in the table is for six cities. As per the table, the oldest underground
railway
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 service provider is in London and
also
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 covers the longest rail routes (1863 and 394 km of routes).
On the other hand
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, Los Angeles is the latest as it opened in 2001 and covers the
second
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 least
railway
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 route of 28 km.
Furthermore
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,
Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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railway
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 service initiated in 1927 but consists
the
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of the
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 largest number of travellers (1927
passengers
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) among all other six cities,
while
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 It is Kyoto
that
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consists of the least number of travellers (45
passengers
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).
Overall
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, two of the oldest systems are London and Paris but it is Paris and Tokyo that
has
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have
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 a large number of
passengers
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 travelling annually; meanwhile, it is London that has the largest route travelled (394 km).
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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