Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults

In my opinion, I think co-operate is more important than sense of

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for children. Parents have

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a responsibility

the responsibility

to teach and encourage their children what has to be done or not to be.

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allow me to share my life experience in my country. When I was young, my personality was very introvert. When someone close with me, I would feel awkward and shy.

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parents work very busy, so they always feel drained when they finished their

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work

.

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, no one can support me until I meet a teacher, Miss Wong. She was really nice and helpful. She

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achieved me to be

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an

homestay

the quality of being honest

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of my family. She let me stand in the basketball team. I feel joyous but

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astonished because no one wants to be around me. She

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encouraged me to be

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extrovert person. She taught me how to co-operate with my teammates when we were processing a basketball

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. Eventually we lost the

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competition but

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competition, but

I got many friends. And we would support each other when who has the problems. In conclusion, I suggest people can use my sample to be more extrovert and positive because I think co-operate is more important than

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.

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just a funny game, if you waste too much time and energy on

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so that just make yourself more anxious. If you want to become

more useful adult

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a more useful adult

more useful adults

, you may have responsibility when you are working with other workers.