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Some people say that it is alright to use animals for our benefit; others say it is not good to exploit them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

#people #alright #animals #benefit #points
I passed my SSC exam from Dhaka
Division
 and got
first
division
 with three
letters
Suggestion
letter
 marks in 1991. After that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 got admission to Kobi Najrul Govt college in
Commerce Department
Suggestion
the Commerce Department
 and Successfully passed in HSC exam and
succed
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
succeeds
 in
first
division
 with two letters.
letter
Suggestion
Letter
 on,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completed
Suggestion
have completed
 my post
graguate
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduate
 degree from Dhaka University since 2000, major in management. To be honest,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would enjoy
versity
a British abbreviation of 'university'; usually refers to Oxford University or Cambridge University
varsity
life
 very much as it was versatile
life
 that led me to
practicle
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
life
.
Durning
Suggestion
During
 that time, I joined in Butterfly Marketing
Compmay
Suggestion
Comp May
 Dhaka as an Audit
officcer
any person in the armed services who holds a position of authority or command
officer
 and
contuning
remaining in force or being carried on without letup
continuing
containing
 my
life
 till 2005. After that I moved to another job and engaged myself as
Merchandising profession
Suggestion
a Merchandising profession
 in 2006. I joined to Gomoti Textile and Apparels Ltd and got
proctical
concerned with actual use or practice
practical
 knowledge from
factory
Suggestion
the factory
. Later, I moved to buying house in order to learn buying house skills. I gathered seven years practical experience in
apporch
any member of Athapaskan tribes that migrated to the southwestern desert (from Arizona to Texas and south into Mexico); fought a losing battle from 1861 to 1886 with the United States and were resettled in Oklahoma
Apache
 merchandising.
This
 experience later on created an opportunity to serve banking job. I have joined at UCBL in 2012 as Senior officer in
RMG
Suggestion
the RMG division
an RMG division
division
 under corporate
division
. I am now working
this
division
 for seven years and successfully got
essy
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easy
 promotion on time by the grace of almighty Allah. At present
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am holding as an Assistant vice president in
this
 company. I enjoy my job very much.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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