Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

School is our second
home
. After
home
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students
spending
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more time with their teachers and friends. Always they are learning new things from
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school
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. Some people
suggesting
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that it is a good idea for
schools
to teach every young person how to be a good
parent
. I completely agree with
this
opinion. First of all, some of our modern youths are addicted to
internet
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the internet
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and smartphones.
This
will
some times
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sometimes
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mould them in
negative
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way and will give a wrong direction and
prespectives
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perspectives
perspective
towards
life
. In
this
scenerio
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scenario
schools
plays
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play
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a vital
role
in moulding a
students
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life
.
Schools
should initiate to teach the youths about the importance of parenting.
For
example
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while
I was at
my
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school time, my teacher Mrs. Deena always
give
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us
advises
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how
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to behave in
scoiety
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society
and in
family
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the family
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. She always says that when you become a father always remember that your
kids
always
tends
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to learn from you, so be a
role
model always. I followed her
advise
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in
life
and now I can say that I am a good father.
Schools
should teach them good parenting skills.
Most
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important skill needed
to
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a
parent
is to spend time with their
kids
. We are in a busy
life
with
lot
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of pressure and stress. We need to educate
kids
how
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on how
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to handle
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pressure
and stress in
work place
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the workplace
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. So that they will not take these pressures and stress to
home
. Another skill needed
to
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a Good
parent
is they should always a good
listener
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listeners
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and
advisor
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advisors
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to their
kids
. Good
parent
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parents
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should always a
role
model
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models
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to their
kids
.
Another
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skills
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skill
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for
a
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better parenting are never
use
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using
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bad words , never
take
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taking
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alchohol
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alcohol
or
cigerates
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cigarettes
infront
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in front
of
kids
,
never
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and never
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misbehave
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to
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with
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your parents. It is a fact that the
childs
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learning begins at
home
. They started to learn from their family.
Eventhough
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Even though
schools
play a vital
role
in developing a
childs
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child's
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personality. So it is very important that
schools
should teach young
person
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people
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how to be
a
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apply
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good
parent
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parents
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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