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It is generally observed that almost all high level jobs are done by men.Does it mean that the government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be observed for women? Do you agree or disagree with this proposition?

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Owing to the statement, that the most of the high level jobs are done by men and the government should reserve some percentage of those jobs for women. I agree with
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 statement. Even in
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 modern world, in most of the country the discrimination between men and women exists. All over the world, we have only few women leaders,
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; in the countries like The Germany, the chancellor was a woman, in The United Kingdom the ex prime minister was a woman. So only in few country's the women’s are in key role,
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 considering the company’s or an organisation, most of the jobs are in the hands of men.
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 is due to the many factors,
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 as; men grouping, the dominance of men in every field. In a country or in a company, the majority of the key positions are handled by men,
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 situation has to be changed and the rulers should implement several new policies to reserve some portion of jobs for women. In several countries the ruler's has already passed several laws regarding
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, in India, the system passed a rule that ensures thirty three percent of the seats in the assembly for the women.
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, many rules need to be implemented in companies to ensure that the women’s are in the key position. The thinking that women should only be housewife has to be changed or wiped. Women are capable of doing anything, now days women’s are in every plot, especially they are in those roles which were regarded as most difficult jobs and only meant for men.
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, in the current era we have female pilots, women engineers in the field of oil exploration, etc. In conclusion, most of the key position is handled by men,
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 the discrimination between women and men should be wiped and government should pass several laws or policy favourable to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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