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Overall, with regards to the UK and France has experienced an increase in spending, whereas Spain saw a decline in
investment
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 up until 1990 before recovering. Coming to Germany, financial support rose before slipping after 1990. Focusing on the UK and France,
although
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 the former had an initial
investment
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 of about 58
million
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 euros on tourism, about 40
million
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 euros more than France, the latter witnessed a gradual increase in the spendings almost equalling that of the UK's
investment
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 in 1990 post which both of them had the same growth.
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,
Spain which
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Spain, which
 had the highest
investment
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 of 60
million
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 at the beginning of the period reduced its spendings to around 45
million
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 over the 1980s, after which the figure jumped back to 60
million
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 euros.
German government
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The German government
,
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, gradually increased the investments in the 80s from 20
million
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 to 45
million
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.
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, the numbers saw a drop to 40
million
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 by the end of the period in question.

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