It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, young people fear that they will not be able to find a good job. So, work counsellors advise to invest in

further

instruction rather than try to gain some experience.

However

, I completely disagree with

this

point of view. Due to the lack of employees, especially in specific sectors, entrepreneurs prefer to employ younger people and to train them at work.

Consequently

, people looking for a job tend to hand curriculum vitae in bosses' hands as soon as they graduate.

Moreover

, young people can work much more than others because they are less busy: in fact, they usually do not have to look after children or family.

This

is the main reason why interviewers often ask for the applicant's future plans, in order to understand how much time he could dedicate to the company and contribute to its growth.

On the other hand

, some people could argue that academic preparation is much more important, as it allows

Suggestion

for

best perform required tasks.

However

, even though

this

view could be technically appropriate for certain types of jobs -

for instance

, some scientific careers-, special training may be organized to teach new features or to train the employees to carry out certain activities.

Furthermore

, people can really improve their profit and their abilities by experiencing and practicing. To sum up, business

traineeships

Suggestion

Traineeships

should be encouraged, as they allow both to learn new skills, to earn some money and to gain experience that could be spent when looking for other kinds of jobs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

250 words

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It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that university education should be free, while others believe students should pay for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Provide reasons and examples for your opinion.

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