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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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According to some researchers the future of the world is under threat because of
environment
,
population
 and education. Unfortunately, our
country
 will
also
 have to encounter these problems in the
next
 decade if proper measures are not taken in time.
This
 essay will discuss how these problems might affect our
country
 and the possible solutions to deal with them.
To begin
 with, the most threatening problems that could arise in coming years are the issue of
environment
 and growing
population
 of the
country
. Pollution is increasing rapidly in Pakistan mainly because of increasing traffic.
For instance
, a report released by the Pakistan
Environment
 Department showed that traffic is causing about 70
percent
 of the pollution in the
country
.
On the other hand
, the rise in
population
 will
also
 cause problems for the
country
 in the future as it increases expenses and demands. As a proof, a census in 2017 showed an unprecedented rise of 110
percent
 in
population
 as compared to the
last
 census due to which the government is facing a lot of administrative problems.
Therefore
, these two are the main challenges that
this
country
 has to face in the
next
 decade.
However
, there are solutions to solve these problems
such
 as creating awareness and making strict laws.
Firstly
, the government should teach their public about the consequences of pollution on the
environment
.
For example
, they must educate them that it can cause global warming, which is a global threat to the
environment
.
Secondly
, the administration has to make laws on the number of children parents can have in the future. If we take the example of China, we can see that they have reduced the
population
 growth from 150
percent
 to 45
percent
 by implementing
such
 laws.
Hence
, by taking these initiatives the authorities can solve these problems. In brief, there is no doubt that there are a lot of challenges in
this
 world to face in the coming decades and we have to show our commitment to overcome these problems by obeying the laws that are made in
this
 regard and by reducing pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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