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In past museums storaged information about Culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through Internet. And, therefore, there is no need in museums. Do you aree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, we can check all the
information
 throughout the
internet
 including about the history. Some people thinks that do, we don’t need the museums, but another group thinks we still need it because if the convincing
information
. Overall, I completely disagree with the statement that we don’t need museums Some people believed that it is easy to find all the
information
 about history on the
internet
. So they think it is useless to go to the museums.
On the other hand
, people forgot that they cannot trust all
information
. Sometimes it can be edited by anyone.
Therefore
, we do need museums to make it clear and we can trust about all the document
also
 an
information
 that no one can change or forgery it. A clear example of
this
 is, If a teacher teaches a student at school by researched from the
internet
 and all some part of the
information
 are wrong. And
however
, student have to leaned and understand error document. Another reason of
this
 is that, it is about the feeling for dose people of people who love about the Art and history will understand well that it is not the same mood with we looked at the photo on the
internet
.
Moreover
, people cannot imagine or make it clear about the size, colours, shapes how the and the little details In conclusion, even through you can search all the
information
 you want to know on the
internet
, while it can not give you a feeling you cannot appreciate the things
also
 sometimes it can not trust. We still need the museums to understand what happened in the past,
this
 is very important to know the true things.
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