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In past museums storaged information about Culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through Internet. And, therefore, there is no need in museums. Do you aree or disagree?

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In
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 day and age, we can check all the
information
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 throughout the
internet
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 including about the history. Some people thinks that do, we don’t need the museums, but another group thinks we still need it because if the convincing
information
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. Overall, I completely disagree with the statement that we don’t need museums Some people believed that it is easy to find all the
information
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 about history on the
internet
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. So they think it is useless to go to the museums.
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, people forgot that they cannot trust all
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. Sometimes it can be edited by anyone.
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, we do need museums to make it clear and we can trust about all the document
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 an
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 that no one can change or forgery it. A clear example of
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 is, If a teacher teaches a student at school by researched from the
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 and all some part of the
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 are wrong. And
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, student have to leaned and understand error document. Another reason of
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 is that, it is about the feeling for dose people of people who love about the Art and history will understand well that it is not the same mood with we looked at the photo on the
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.
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, people cannot imagine or make it clear about the size, colours, shapes how the and the little details In conclusion, even through you can search all the
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 you want to know on the
internet
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, while it can not give you a feeling you cannot appreciate the things
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 sometimes it can not trust. We still need the museums to understand what happened in the past,
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 is very important to know the true things.

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