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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 and foremost reason is that, our heritage is primary cause to save to
next
 generation which lead to enhance their knowledge and they will
also
 give respect to historical buildings so that's way, it is duty of government they expand money for beauty and saving heritage , And another merit is that, because of beauty, majority of people visit there which
consequently
 to improve tourism which assist to get work to native masses so that's way they full their needs On the flip side, Those anchor who say that, Authority ought to invest lucre in new places. There are several merits of modern areas.
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nation
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nation
 in other countries and
also
 improve bonding each other which would help to firm contact with each other
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