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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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People intake more cooked
food
 from manufactures than they ate many years ago.
This
 is because we tend to work busier compared to the past and leads to unbalance of nutrition
intaken
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
intake
 for more and more people. People tend to eat more processed
food
 than past because they are expected to spend more
time
 on their work.
This
 is because the current market is more
compactitive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
, and many people, both employers or employees, want to generate greater value.
This
 means that they have to take more rest
time
 away from their life and invest it in their work, which includes
time
 of eating. In
this
 case, they do not have
time
 to prepare
food
 by for themselves, and try to get some fast
food
 from shops in order to save
time
.
For example
, a mushrooming number of fast
food
resturants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
,
such
 as KFC and Subway, are opening in many cities. The primary effect of
this
plural of "this"
these
 causes that the unbalanced diet becomes a common public health issue.
This
 is to say that in order to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 people's needs, processed
food
 has to include a large number of calories and fat which can make humans full quickly and keep
this
 feeling for a long
time
.
However
, too much energy accumulates in people's body, and cause a negative effect on each organ of individuals and even result in higher risk of cancer.
For instance
, the
presentage
Suggestion
present age
 percentage of
cancer
Suggestion
cancers
has been increasing
Suggestion
have been increasing
 steadily in the world, and one of
important reasons
Suggestion
the important reasons
 is the rapid popularizing of junk
food
. In conclusion, people choose more processed
food
 than in previous generations due to more workload and the effect is a public health problem caused by overtaken of some nutrition elements.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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