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Some student work while studying. This often result in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.

#student #work #time #education #pressure
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Well, nowadays most of the students start doing part
time
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 jobs while studying. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss
this
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 issue at length and
also
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 will tell my suggestion.
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, I would like to tell student going to job to fulfil their basic needs, college exam fees, for buying study materials, and mainly for college annual fees. Some of them are studying through an education loan so they will go to
work
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 for paying interest monthly. Even they are few students going to
work
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 because their parent depending on that money only.
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, They won'
t
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 get enough
time
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 to prepare well for exams most of
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time
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the time
 they will just pass and even sometimes they will fail in difficult subjects. They will have some pressure in
work
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 they can'
t
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 able to complete their task in a given
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time so
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time, so
 need to do extra
time
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 which will decrease studying hour. Many times they won'
t
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 get leave before exam
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 where it will directly affect
result
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the results
results
. Only few
them
people in general
they
succeded
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeeded
succeed
 while doing both.
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, Dr. A P J Abdulkam. Others will have only low percentages with that they won'
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 get
good job
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a good job
 easily.
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, I would like to suggest, some NGO can do
sponsership
the act of sponsoring (either officially or financially)
sponsorship
 for studying, education loan need to provide without collecting interest from them while studying, and companies must follow some timing for students should not ask them to do extra
time
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. In conclusion, I suggest student should not
work
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 while studying need to concentrate only on studies so while completing they will have good percentage which will helpful in getting
high paid job
Suggestion
a high paid job
.

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