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In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different part of their country after their retirement. Discuss why they do so and what the outcome of this situation is. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Most
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 retirees have spent almost half their lifetime working, and deciding to
live
go away from a place
leave
 to another
country
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 after retirement has been a common trend nowadays, especially for people who come from rich western countries. There are two main reasons for
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 practice, one of which is practicality, and the other reason is for leisure, and in
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 essay, I will discuss what outcomes from retiring to another
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 might bring. When a person retires, his main source of money will be from the pension that he will receive monthly from the security fund that he paid for when he was working. For people living in western countries,
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 money might not be enough, so most of them will opt to live in
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 world countries like the
Philippines where
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Philippines, where
 the value of their money will be multiplied up to fifty times.
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, aside from living a luxurious lifestyle in
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 world countries, they can
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 enjoy new sceneries, environment and culture that they never had or experienced because they were very busy working when they were younger. In my experience, most of the foreign retirees that I have encountered in my
country
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 the Philippines
where
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were
 able to assimilate well with the locals. Some of them even got married and formed a new family of their own in their new
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, they even set up businesses that are very successful.
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, I
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 encountered some foreigners that had some unfortunate stories because they were scammed by some locals. I
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have also seen
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 in the local news about foreigners taking their own lives because of depression, in fact, more than half of the suicide cases in my hometown are foreign retirees who came to the Philippines to retire. In general, from a westerner’s perspective, retiring to a
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-world
country
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 like the Philippines is very tempting especially for people who want to live an above modest lifestyle while at the same time enjoying the scenery and meeting new people.
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, leaving everything behind from a
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 where people spent for more than fifty years of their life is
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 a huge challenge.
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