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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The growing trend of ready-made foods aid individuals to meet up the pace of modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
Besides
 being relieved from going into the kitchen to cook after a stressful day, the individual gain more relaxation time to himself / herself to rest or do more work.
However
, he/she develops an unhealthy eating habit which in my opinion, outweighs the benefits. To be productive in modern lifestyle, one requires energy to keep up with the pace. While the energy is sourced from the
food
 we eat, time is
need
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needed
 to prepare home-made foods to meet up with the energy need of the body. So, to gain more time to relax, eat and remain productive, fast foods becomes handy. They are readily available, close to our homes,
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 and of different dishes.
This
 eating habit can be costly to maintain.
For example
 a plate of
jellof
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jell of
 rice with chicken and salad
in
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at
 a fast
food
 joint cost twice the cost of buying the ingredients and making
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 the same
food
 at home. Individuals who cannot meet up with the cost implication of ready-made
food
 may become malnourished.
On the other hand
, those who can buy
readymade
Suggestion
ready made
food
 can over eat and become obese, both could be detrimental to health. In conclusion, I do believe that one may not always keep up with the demand of home-made
food
.
Therefore
, I encourage
occasional ready-made
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the occasional ready-made food
food
 to maintain healthy living
also
 needed in modern lifestyle.
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