The average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of this and suggest some remedies to solve this problem.

Obesity and
health
related issues are at its peak compared to the
last
2 decades. It is believed that there is a huge decline in the level of
health
and fitness which in turn resulted in the rise in average weight of people. What are the reasons and causes behind it
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In
this
essay, we will be discussing the main causes for
this
issue and
also
the solutions which might help us reduce the impact of
this
problem. The influence of western culture and
food
choices is the biggest cause of
health
problems
such
as
increase
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an increase
in weight. The rise in the popularity of junk
food
that we have borrowed from the western world. Many people are skipping healthy meals and substituting their diet with burgers, pizzas etc. The main reason behind
this
is
convenience
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convenient
,
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,
Fast
food
joints
such
as Mc Donalds, PIzza hut are easily available and are more appealing to the crowd. Another cause
to
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of
this
problem is the corporate culture, both men and women are working these days to support their livelihood and keeping in mind their busy schedule and hectic working hours, they can barely squeeze out time to eat, let alone eat healthy
food
which results in eating what is easily available to them. Now looking at the ways by which
this
uprising issue can be taken care
off
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of
, Recently in Japan, the working days were reduced from 5
day
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days
a week to 4 days which resulted in an increase in the employee productivity by 40%.
Although
implementing
this
step won't see immediate
results but
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results, but
definitely see a gradual change as people will get 3 days in a week to focus on their
health
, hit the gym
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
which is not possible during the busy work schedule. To recapitulate in short, Corporates should
also
start implementing fitness activities in the work routine, establish gym/fitness centres in the premise.
This
will help in reducing stress and let people have a healthy and
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
free life style.
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