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The average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of this and suggest some remedies to solve this problem.

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Obesity and
health
 related issues are at its peak compared to the
last
 2 decades. It is believed that there is a huge decline in the level of
health
 and fitness which in turn resulted in the rise in average weight of people. What are the reasons and causes behind it
?
Accept space
?
 In
this
 essay, we will be discussing the main causes for
this
 issue and
also
 the solutions which might help us reduce the impact of
this
 problem. The influence of western culture and
food
 choices is the biggest cause of
health
 problems
such
 as
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in weight. The rise in the popularity of junk
food
 that we have borrowed from the western world. Many people are skipping healthy meals and substituting their diet with burgers, pizzas etc. The main reason behind
this
 is
convenience
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convenient
,
Accept space
,
 Fast
food
 joints
such
 as Mc Donalds, PIzza hut are easily available and are more appealing to the crowd. Another cause
to
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of
this
 problem is the corporate culture, both men and women are working these days to support their livelihood and keeping in mind their busy schedule and hectic working hours, they can barely squeeze out time to eat, let alone eat healthy
food
 which results in eating what is easily available to them. Now looking at the ways by which
this
 uprising issue can be taken care
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
, Recently in Japan, the working days were reduced from 5
day
Suggestion
days
 a week to 4 days which resulted in an increase in the employee productivity by 40%.
Although
 implementing
this
 step won't see immediate
results but
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results, but
 definitely see a gradual change as people will get 3 days in a week to focus on their
health
, hit the gym
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 which is not possible during the busy work schedule. To recapitulate in short, Corporates should
also
 start implementing fitness activities in the work routine, establish gym/fitness centres in the premise.
This
 will help in reducing stress and let people have a healthy and
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
 free life style.
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