The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
The pie chart and bar chart
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information about the
perportion
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proportion
of people arrested in the
five
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ending 1994 and
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cases
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respectively. The data
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in percentage. It is crystal clear that the individuals who are
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in
five
years
ending 1994.
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males
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who
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imprisonment
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where
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which
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was
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not arrested.
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, 91
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women
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arrested. Shifting attention to the rest information, there are various reasons for
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arrest
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. Primarily, nearly 27
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males
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arrest
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for
drink
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whereas
approximately 14
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women
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catch for
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driving. Moving
further
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males
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imprison for public drinking which
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almost 8
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less than
women
.
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, about 12
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women
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arrest
for breach of order which
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7
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less than
males
. Nearly,
males
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maximum than
women
for
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. Females and
males
arrest
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for other reasons nearly 18
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.
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, about 4
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males
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and nearly 7
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females
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arrest
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for no answer.
Overall
,
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males
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percentage are maximum than
females
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In
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five
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arrest
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • arrests
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • age group
  • contrast
  • significance
  • factors
  • societal implications
  • crime
  • economic
  • social factors
  • legal factors
  • preventive measures
  • interventions
  • data analysis
  • demographics
  • reasons for arrest
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