me believe that it is the reponsibility of the people to care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of environment. discuss both views and state your opinion.

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environmental changes like global warming. So,

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products and they have to use alternate resources like solar power energy and wind energy

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changes. So, it is more important that both the industries and the Government authorities

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hands together to save the

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to lead a peaceful and healthier life.

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task response

Task Response: The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both views and providing a clear opinion, but it lacks a balanced discussion of the two positions. Try to present a more balanced view by giving equal attention to both sides of the argument.

coherence and cohesion

Coherence and Cohesion: The logical structure of the essay is generally clear, but there are some areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. Work on developing smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

275 words

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art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?