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me believe that it is the reponsibility of the people to care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of environment. discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Now days
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, most
of
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the
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people
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 are involving themselves
to take
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in taking
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 care of the
environment
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.
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 some
people
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 believe that state authorities should take proper initiative to control the
environment
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. I completely disagree on
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 and in
this
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essay
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 I will support my opinions with examples.
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,
people
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 prefer to live in peaceful and green
place
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places
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 where they feel positive
to lead
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about leading
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the
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a
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 life and pollution
free
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.
This
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 could happen if they start
with
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caring
their
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about their
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 surroundings.
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, in
India
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India,
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 most
of
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the
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people
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 have
got
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proper awareness
about
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of
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the
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environmental changes like global warming. So,
people
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 started to plant trees across the city with the help of public service companies,
although
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 they are using biodegradable or recycling materials for packing.
Secondly
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, Industries should
also
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 want to contribute
for
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to
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environment
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environmental
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 control like producing degradable or
recycle
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recycled
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 products and they have to use alternate resources like solar power energy and wind energy
instead
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 of traditional oil or coal energy
source
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sources
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.
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, recently countries around the world started migrating to Electric vehicles. In India, the Government has passed strict
law
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laws
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 to stop manufacturing and selling of BS4 vehicles in the country and they are approaching the
people
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 to move for Electric vehicles which results in a good amount of pollution control. I strongly believe that
this
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 could result in good
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environment
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environmental
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 changes
the
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 way forward.
To conclude
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, I believe most of the adolescent
people
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 are well educated and have plenty of knowledge about
the
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environment
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environmental
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 changes. So, it is more important that both the industries and the Government authorities
should
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join
their
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hands together to save the
environment
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 to lead a peaceful and healthier life.

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task response
Task Response: The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both views and providing a clear opinion, but it lacks a balanced discussion of the two positions. Try to present a more balanced view by giving equal attention to both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The logical structure of the essay is generally clear, but there are some areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. Work on developing smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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