In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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or travel for
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year
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during
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finishing high school and starting
university
studies in some countries.
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essay will discuss
benefits
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and drawbacks. The
benefits
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of working or traveling
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young
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age is they will have working
experiences
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experience
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. It will
helpful
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after they graduate
university
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from university
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and they will not have difficulties on their first day at
work
. They will not have time to travel during
university
studies. It is
chance
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to travel and relax before going to
university
.
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young people can learn new
culture
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cultures
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,
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and
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laguages
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languages
language
and find some resources for their
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presentations
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university
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.
Furthermore
, they can
work
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university
if the payment of
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is enough for them.
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, young people can run their own businesses if
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successful.
On the other hand
, they might not bear loading in some
workplace
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, so it will bring negative
effect
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.
However
, working before going to
university
is good for them, it has a little deficiency. Probably they cannot learn all knowledge of study in
university
university
for 4 years.
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on their
choise
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choice
Conclusion,they will try to find
work
, but no one will take them for a
work
without
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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