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The number of children that read for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

#children #fun #years
Books are
good way
Suggestion
a good way
 to develop imagination and new
intersting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
 ideas and thoughts. But year by year a number of young people and children, who read books at their leisure time or just for fun
rocketly
inclined to shake as from weakness or defect
rickety
decresed
made less in size or amount or degree
decreased
. What are the main causes and how could people prevent
this
 problem?
First
 of all,
21st century
Suggestion
the 21st century
 is the century of new technologies, investigated to make human's life easier, so books in their actual type (printed) become less common, while electronic (e-books) are replacing them. Children are more interested in
youtube
Suggestion
YouTube
 videos and games, than
on
Suggestion
in
 classic literature, so technological devices are more significant for them.
Secondly
, some parents are trying to make their kids to read scientific or classic literature, without asking their preferences, which make children to read less. Sometimes children must read because their parents want them to do it, but it is not their choice. There is no problem with finding right genre or interesting topic, which everyone can choose according to his own thoughts, so parents should
listen their children
Suggestion
listen to their children
. Classical, fairy tails, sci-fi, romance and thousands of genres love to reading should appear in the soul, and adults just need to open the door to
amazing world
Suggestion
the amazing world
 of books, where everyone could find himself.
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