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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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People have different views about whether we should assign children
homework
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 after
school
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. While some people think that after-class
homework
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 is not a necessity, I can see its importance in students’ study. The advocates of no
homework
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 base their argument on the assumption that children should not bear the extra burden from the study in their leisure. It is true that nowadays
school
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 is as demanding as a full-time job. Expecting students
to do
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do
homework
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 and revise exams can be overwhelming to them, given that they have already completed 8 hours studying at schools. In fact, their precious free time should be spent on outdoor activities, sports, or simply having fun with their peers because they deserve an enjoyable childhood and these extracurricular activities are conducive to develop a well-rounded and healthy kid. In spite of the above arguments, other people still believe that assignments are essential in the education and I agree. It is an effective way for students to digest and absorb the knowledge. Through doing
homework
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, students can practice
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applying
 what they have learnt in class, hone the areas that they understand well, and figure out the areas that they need improvements. Compared with those who put the study aside after
school
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, students with regular
knowledge revising
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knowledge, revising
 are likely to have better academic performance.
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, in my opinion, after-
school
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 assignment doesn’t have to be a pressure to for students. As long as teachers give a reasonable amount of
homework
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, which means that children can finish them within 1-2 hours, there is plenty of time for them to enjoy lives. To conclude,
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 some people think that students should be free from
homework
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, it seems to me that it is indispensable in
school
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 education and it is not necessarily burdensome to children.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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