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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase affect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative?

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Nowadays, our environment is heavily encapsulated with different forms of advertisements, and
this
 is having an enormous impact on our lives. It is important to consider if the benefits of these effects outweigh its disadvantages. In my opinion, there are more drawbacks from the outcomes of advertisements. To some scholars, advertisement has positive influences on society. They assert that advertising, which is a key part of modern business, helps create jobs, and it
also
 has increased the standard of living as it improves the economy.
For example
, it is estimated that advertisement contributes about 2% to the Nigerian GDP and employs about 100 thousand people. In their view, without advertising, there would be a higher unemployment rate.
However
, I believe that in spite of these positive views, there are more negative effects of advertisements. One of
such
 is that advertisers focus usually on selling brands with considerations of the impact
such
 brand have on people. Take
for instance
 the consequences tobacco has on people’s health. Despite it being the most important risk factor for cancer, which is the most prevalent health burden in advance countries, advertising companies still go ahead to promote it because it is marketable.
Furthermore
, the persuasive nature of the industry makes it easier to influence minors who might not have the ability to make informed choices.
As a result
, if
this
 impact is not curbed, our children might be at the mercy of what advertising agencies put out. To recapitulate,
although
 experts believe that advertisement industry helps the economy, there seems to be loss of moral in it, and there are increasingly influencing teens in a more negative way that positive

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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