It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should focus on people in their own countries. To what extend you agree or disagree?
Although
some people
believe that governments
have to give all the attention to their citizens only, I am strongly convinced that supporting neighbor
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neighbour
countries
should also
be one of the government’s plans. Only if the governments
, along with
the nongovernmental organizations do their best to be a backbone for other boundary land, will we be able to make the best use of what other countries
could provide us with. On the one hand, I believe that it is vital to help our neighbors
citizens. In most communities there are Change noun form
neighbor's
neighbors'
people
who suffering
from poverty, starvation and Change the form of the verb
suffer
being homeless
, Wrong verb form
homelessness
however
I think that individuals can union with the Add a comma
however,
governments
to diminish the number of suffering people
. For example
, in England, volunteers donate money, clothes and even food where
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apply
as
it seems a small help but certainly it makes a positive difference for someone living without a roof over their head. Correct word choice
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On the other hand
, I would argue that governments
have a commitment to help other countries
. For instance
, in Africa, everyday
children are suffering from epidemic diseases, neighbor Correct word choice
apply
countries
can provide them by air with vaccines which is an effortless help but may save a
thousands of lives. In conclusion, perhaps we cannot help all Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
people
over the world but I believe that we should try to give a hand to the
others as much as we can.Correct article usage
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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