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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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For a long
time
 since the invention of writing and despite the high prices, books have been not only one of the most reliable source of information but an essential way of entertainment for people of all ages. Regrettably, after the 20th century's technological revolution, reading books in leisure
time
 has significantly dropped in popularity, conceding in popularity for more available entertaining items.
Moreover
,
this
 declining trend is more pronounced among younger generations, especially the children.
This
 essay will discuss the possible reasons why reading as a form of pastime is not popular among children as it used to be and the ways of solving
this
 problem. Having been born in the age of high
technlogies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of children are surrounded by the smart devices from the very moment of their birth. Most of parents due to the overwhelming amount of work prefer to engage their offspring with gadgets to spend
time
 teaching ore reading books with them. Modern educational programmes
also
 support using more computer based resources and teaching methods in the classroom substituting traditional textbooks and fiction books.
This
 leads to the considerable decrease in the number of children
prefering
make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc
preparing
preferring
 using modern gadgets to reading books in order to have fun. Reading books
has been proved
Suggestion
proved
 to help readers develop their imagination and critical thinking skills so the necessity of teaching children to read in their pastime is essential. One of the ways to encourage schoolchildren read more in their free
time
 is their parents and other adults showing that they allocate an adequate amount of
time
 on reading books. Another option that may motivate children to read fiction or non-fiction in their leisure
time
 is providing schools and other educational institutions working with youngsters with a reasonable and modern amount of support aiming at improving school libraries. To conclude, reading children will surely become thinking people in the future and will be more able to adapt to the common changes and challenges than children that do not engage themselves with reading. It is obvious that all people interested in creating a better society should responsible in increasing the number of not only children but all people spending
time
 on reading for pleasure, so there
should be put
Suggestion
should put
 as much effort as it can be done.
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