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Some people thinks that governments should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #governments #tax #food
I partially agree
to
Suggestion
with
 the statement that
government
 should
increase
 tax on unhealthy
food
 to encourage people to start eating healthy. In
this
 fast paced modern society, we consume a variety of fast
food
 which is detrimental to our health. People
nowadays finds
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nowadays find
are nowadays finding
 it hard to take out time to cook a healthy meal mainly due to hectic work schedules and convenience of options available to order
food
 online on click of a button. Due to
this
 type of lifestyle people eat
lot
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lots
 of junk
food
 which is very unhealthy. A lot of research studies revealed that due to unhealthy
food
 habits people are suffering from various ailments like diabetes, obesity, heart problems etc. Some people
thinks
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think
 that
government
 should
increase
 the tax on these unhealthy foods to induce healthier
food
 habits.
This
 approach proved successful in some other consumption items like cigarettes, sugary drinks, alcohol etc.
in
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In
 various countries. People tend to consume lesser the item the costlier it gets.
This
 would
also
 lead to
increase
 in
government
 revenue in
taxes which
Accept comma addition
taxes, which
 can in turn can be deployed towards raising awareness about the negative impacts of these kinds
food
 on our health.
However
, there is another side to
this
 issue, some people perceives it as just
increase
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an increase
the increase
 in
cost
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the cost
 of living on lesser privileged sections of the society. They argue that healthier
food
 comes with higher prices and by increasing tax on these fast
food
 items the
government
 will put unnecessary burden on the poor because rich people are anyway going to consume it irrespective of the price rise. To summarise
this
, I believe that
government
 should
increase
 taxes on unhealthy
food
 items and at the same time should make efforts to ensure that healthy
food
 becomes available at affordable prices to encourage an overall health
food
 habit in the society.

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