Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre school age. Other working people think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are split opinion regarding baby
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centres are better option for providing an appropriate services to children. Whereas,
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any of various alternatives; some other
another
group of people support grandparents would better carers for their babies. Both views has its own pros and cons. I
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however believe
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however, believe
that
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centred services are good for children in the age group of 3 to 5 years. Because of the management and the whole staff members are trained and large number of equipments
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available there for looking after the children. Examine the former
decivsion
the act of making up your mind about something
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, the primary arguments would put forward is for children's better
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only baby
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centres are suitable to keep
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objective case of they
them
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safe and for nurturing.
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is because their way of dealing the problem related to
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child
children's
child's
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valuable and all of them
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have a professional degree
level.
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, they are educated and give preference to cleanliness.
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, the latter view suggests that family members can take better
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for their children. They believe that “Blood is thicker than blood”. By
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, they mean
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care
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centres have not the feelings of
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. Beside
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,
child
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centre's nurses beat kids when they are in anger. To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that
child
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care
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centre's are good for giving a
services
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service
to children of pre
age school
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school age
. Because they have all the
qualification
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qualifications
and values
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is an appropriate way to deal with
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situation.

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