Business should provide sports and, social facilities to the local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

With the advent of modernization, a growing number of people choose to move to urban areas from the countryside. There is always a debate that whether to invest in
fitness
or social features, while building a local
community
for the increasing dwellers. In my point of view, it is beneficial for the business to add these features. Undoubtedly that sports and social
community
features in a housing estate cost money and effort.
First
of all, stakeholders have to spare a portion of the area, which could have been constructed to be a storied house to get profit, for social and sports facilities.
Secondly
, maintaining these facilities can be expensive and has to be done regularly to prevent user injury.The maintenance must be professional enough to find out all the potential risks
such
as sharp edge exposures and rusted surfaces. 
Although
the investment on
fitness
and social facilities seems to be risky, the return will be promising.
To begin
with, these
community
features can increase residents’ sense of satisfaction. Those who feel lonely can hang out with someone in the meadow. Those who find boring at home can workout in the
fitness
centre. Those who walk a dog can make friends with each other when they meet. In that, the residents will not only tell their friends how GOOD
this
community
is but
also
refer them to move in. More importantly, including sports and social facilities will make the
community
more competitive than others. In
this
informative world, a majority of people start to accept the theory that exercising can keep them healthy.
Therefore
, people tend to look for a
community
integrated with
fitness
centre.   In conclusion, from sports and social facilities can raise residents’ satisfactory, which will eventually benefit the business, I believe the stakeholders ought to provide
such
features in their communities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate philanthropy
  • Stakeholder engagement
  • Community-centric
  • Health and wellness
  • Infrastructure
  • Socioeconomic impact
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Public-private partnership
  • Grassroots initiatives
  • Civic-minded business practices
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