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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Modern
technology
 revolutionized our lives in many ways. It changed the way of communication, transport, shopping, economy and a lot, there are no alternatives for
technology
 in some fields. In
such
 a way it has influenced our lives. Internet plays major in
this
 revolution. It transformed everything. Some people argue that
this
technology
 is going to create a single
world
 culture. I completely agree with that statement. Accessibility of the information is the biggest agenda of the internet, which connected all parts of the
world
. Internet raised the boundaries between countries, by connecting each and everyone in
this
world
 together.
This
 allowed everyone, not only to interact with other cultures, but
also
 share their own.
This
 type of interactions possible because of
this
 modern
technology
. More than three fourth of the population is using smart phones, which is providing access to anything today. A mother from USA can talk to her kid in Japan, two friends can see each other using video call.
This
 chances throughout
world
Suggestion
the world
 not only making people understand others from different cultures, but
also
 making people to build up a common culture of mutual sharing.
For example
, there are different festivals celebrated by different cultural backgrounds, now a day there are some festivals celebrated by many countries because of the cultural sharing. Not only festivals, languages, food, dressing many other things are becoming more common everywhere. To conclude,
technology
 has a great potential to bring all humans on one boat, and can erase all differences.
This
 may be not gonna happen in one day, but eventually we all are going to see a new
world
.
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