Now the machine is very complex, and a lot of difficult work is automated. Does this machine automation have more pros than cons?

In the
comtemporary
characteristic of the present
contemporary
era,
Machines
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the machines
the Machines
are exceptionally complicated and a lot of challenging tasks are performed by automated machines.
Although
this
phenomenon will effect the employment of the people to some
extent but
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extent, but
tasks will be completed on
time
without any errors and
this
will
also
ensure
workers
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worker
workers'
safety. In my opinion complex tasks should be performed by machines;
nevertheless
, both positive and
negetive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
aspects will be discussed in
this
essay.
To begin
with the bright side, Automated machines will complete the
work
on
time
. Since the machines are Computerized, they are programmed to do a
peice
a separate part of a whole
piece
pic
of
work
n
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
number
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the number
of times in a controlled environment due to which the overall
time
of the operation will be decreased
drasticlly
in a drastic manner
drastically
.
In addition
Computerized machine will ensure the safety of the workers as the operations are performed without any human interaction.
Moreover tasks
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Moreover, tasks
will be completed error free because the machines are pre programmed to do a
work
in repetition.
For instance
a recent survey conducted by times of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
revealed that productivity of the
tata
constituting the full quantity or extent; complete
total
motar
a woman who has given birth to a child (also used as a term of address to your mother)
mother
plant was increased by 60% once they included automated machines in
there
of them or themselves
their
factory.
On the contrary
, there are some inevitable drawbacks associated.
Firstly
, though by assigning complex
work
to the automated machines can play a crucial role to increase the
productivity but
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productivity, but
at the same
time
it will adversely
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the employment of the individuals.
Secondly
, Since these machines
runs
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run
on electrical energy, there will be rapid growth in power consumption which will directly
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the environment. To cite an example, according to
a
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an
annual survey held in 2018 almost 30% of the individuals lost
there
of them or themselves
their
jobs due to automated machines. In my prospective, difficult tasks must be performed by automated machines as they increase the overall productivity by producing goods in the
alloted
given as a task
allotted
time
with
low margin
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a low margin
of
era
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the era
an era
. At the same
time
regulatory checks must be performed to ensure job security of the individuals. In conclusion, after pondering over a great deal of thought I would reiterate that complex tasks should be performed by computerized machines as it will decrease the overall
time
consumption to produce
a
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an
error free good.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
will
also
ensure the safety of the workers. Regulatory checks should
also
be considered to ensure the security of the
individuals
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individual
individual's
individuals'
job.
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