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Some people think that in order to protect the environment, we should reduce air travel. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people have been increasingly concerned about the harmful effects of the increasing volume
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transport
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. I strongly agree that we should reduce
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 travel in order to safeguard the environment.
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 with, the increasing demand for
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 travel has significantly contributed to environmental damage and global warming. Compared to other modes of
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,
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 as cars or trains, planes account for
the highest
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the high
 level of carbon dioxide emissions released to the atmosphere. In effect, the huge increase in
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 pollution, with bad effects on human and animal health, is significantly due to the rapid growth in
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transport
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. What is more, exhaust fumes from planes are
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 the greatest source of greenhouse gases leading to global warming and climate change which are perhaps the greatest threat to life on earth. There are those who argue,
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, that
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 travel is essential for global commerce and business people. They point out that in
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 case passengers cannot depend on other means of
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 and the benefits of travelling by
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 are indisputable.
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, it is my belief that
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 alternatives as teleconferencing can reduce the need for business flights.
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, advocates of the aviation industry claim that a number of measures have been being taken to reduce the amount of carbon emissions by modern aircraft.
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, the potential for eco-friendly flying looks rather limited because of the huge time, cost and coordinated effort needed to bring it about. It is
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 an impractical solution for the immediate and urgent problem of reducing pollution and climate change. Taking these points into consideration, I agree that there should be
reduction
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a reduction
 in the use of
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traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 if human beings want to avoid destroying the environment in which they live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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