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Nowadays people get married and have children after the age of 30. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples based on your experiences.

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In
this
 modern society, a lot of couples decide to get married lately because of several advantages and disadvantages reasons. In the following essay, I would like to discuss on both view and give some real-life example to support my view. On the one hand,
this
 trend is very normal in nowadays. Couples decide to get late married because they want to have a stable job and success carrier
first
. When people think they have enough ability, they will start to
thinking
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think
 about to organize a family and have a baby. It is very
frustrated
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frustrating
 to have a family when people do not have enough money. So they will make a serious decision before they get married.
Also
, if couples get married too early, they will have no more freedom to do their own things
such
 as travel, have their own business.
On the other hand
, the benefit
for
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of
from
get
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getting
 married and have a baby after 30s’ is the family will be more stable. In the
recently
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recent
 reports, the
young’s
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young
 couples getting divorce percent become highly risk since few years ago. After age of 30s’ people they are being more mature and not a naive adults. They already have a lot of experience in their life. They can have a good communication and not easy to get
divorce
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divorced
. It is important that children can have a good environment for
grow
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growing
grown
 up. To sum up, get married and have a
children
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child
 after age of 30s’
have
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has
 pros and cons. There is no doubt that the benefits are more than drawbacks. I think a family should raise in a healthy and stable environment from the start.
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