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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the number of young figureheads that are keen on reading, which has gone down dramatically. It is completely agreed that reading preferences and time spent for it have decreased.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons of it.
although
Suggestion
Although
 books would be an integral part of community, children consider them superficial for the reason that there are many other things to be interested in. Smart devices are
considerable part
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a considerable part
 of our lives because they help to escape from the reality we live in. As a teenager,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can say that seeking ways to start reading a book or studying is more difficult than
prefering
like better; value more highly
preferring
proffering
preparing
 to chill out with social media. Children are more likely under the pressure,
therefore
 looking at smartphones helps us to find what we need. Children are more than adults made of, but acting as
person
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a person
the person
 is full of stress when there is no people to follow.
Admitedly
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Admittedly
, adults are obligated to tell what is good and what is not. No enough attention by parents and surroundings leads to the spending time on
social network
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the social network
social networks
, that's
acts
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acting
 of adults must be started.
as
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As
 a result
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 want to say that modern books must be more realistic which means having
striking resemblance
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a striking resemblance
with
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to
real world
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the real world
 to learn
life-long
continuing through life
lifelong
 lesson, which will obviously increase the number of people interested in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Screen-based entertainment
  • Deprioritizing
  • Storytelling
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Underfunded
  • Affordability
  • Curriculums
  • Foster
  • Digital-native generation
  • Gamify
  • Community-driven
  • Diverse collection
  • Milestones
  • Incentivize
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