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museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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The flow chart illustrates the way in which electricity is made in a hydroelectric
power
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 station. Overall, there are several stages in the whole electricity process, beginning with river current and ending with delivering the electric energy through the national grid.
To begin
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, the river current enters into the High
level
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reservoir
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, which is blocked by the Darm that allows the
water
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 to enter into a tunnel related to the
power
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 station. The dam blocks the
water
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 during the night time and open during the day time. After the
water
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 passes through the dam, the flow of
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 enters in the reversible turbine, which operates with the generator by pumping the
water
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 in a Low
level
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reservoir
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 during the day. Once the
water
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 has been conserved in the low
level
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reservoir
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, it stays in
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reservoir
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 until the night, where all processes are inverted, allowing the
water
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, from the low
level
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reservoir
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, to reach the High
level
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reservoir
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. In the subsequent stage, the movements created by moving the reversible turbines, which is linked with the generator, create the electric
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.
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,
this
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 electricity is
then
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 transported through
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 lines to the national grid.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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