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Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include my relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Public
Suggestion
The public school
school
 has had no payment to
study
 in there because the
government
 has
controled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
this
 educational institution with citizen's taxes.
Although
this
 institution has huge benefit
such
 as free fee, some parents send their children to private
school
 to get higher education even the cost of
fee
Suggestion
the fee
fees
 is
quitely
with low volume
quietly
 expensive. From
this
 situation, some people say that families should not
required
Suggestion
require
 to pay taxes for supporting universal education.
This
 essay will agree that even though they spend a plenty of
money
 for their children, they should absolutely pay taxes. One side of opinion is that some parents who send their children to private not
government
-financed
school
 do not need to pay taxes because they use a plenty of
money
 to let their kids
study
 hard. Following some
scientifical
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
 articles, many couples use most of their
money
 to let their kids
study
 in
good place
Suggestion
a good place
, so, they volunteer for their sons and daughters.
Therefore
, some people say
government
Suggestion
the government
have
Suggestion
has
 to give some benefits to them
such
 as no tax.
On the other hand
, other people say that it is one of a choice, so, it is up to them because private
school
 is known-well of the expensive institution, so, many people prefer
government
-financed
school
. For instant, if a student attend the private
school
, people can expect that his parents are rich, because the expense of
that is
quitely
with low volume
quietly
 high for people who earn average wage. So, the people who really want some helps from
government
 are the people who wish
let
Suggestion
to let
 their child to
better
Suggestion
a better school
better schools
the better school
school
, yet, do not have enough
money
 not like others. In conclusion, even though some people send their child to private
school
, they should completely pay taxes, because all the citizens pay it for making
better world
Suggestion
a better world
. In my view, the
government
 should make the level of quality and quantity of all the
school
's
study
 same.

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