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The world's natural resources are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of this situation? What should we do

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It is true that there is a growing consumption of natural resources on a global scale.
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 there will be some glaring negative consequences of
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 trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems. As the raw materials are overused indiscriminately, several related problems can be anticipated. The main issue is that the non-renewable resources, existing in nature in a limited way because their regeneration involves the passage of many years, will obviously become exhausted in the near future.
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 can pose a threat to the economy of developing countries. When mineral resources,
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 as oil, natural gas and coal, take an alarming turn with over exploitation, necessitating prices of related commodities to be spared, customers have to pay more for gasoline and electric bills.
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,
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 issue, possibly led to a fuel war between countries which are depending on mineral wealth because their national economies relied to raw materials export. Another consequence is a greater level of environmental contamination. In recent years, forest fires have increased rapidly due to oil and coal mining, which require a considerable amount of forest land. To avoid
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 scenario, governments could take several actions.
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, the simple solutions would be to organize green campaigns to raise public awareness about saving
energy
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, we could consume less
energy
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 by improving and modernizing
energy
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 infrastructure
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 as smart grid solutions and smart cities. The
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 remedy is that alternative sources of
energy
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,
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 as solar power, wind power and tidal power, should be developed to reduce our dependence on fossil fuel. In conclusion, the increase in the world’s demand for natural resources has engendered a number of problems to society.
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,
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 can be handled by adopting above mentioned suggestions.

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