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Some people feel that the exploration of space justifies a large amount of government and private investment. Other people think that this field is of increasingly low relevance, and should not be a priority. Debate both sides of this discussion, and explain your own view. How important is it for us to explore space at the moment?

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Space
 exploration is a subject which provokes great emotions
as well as
 scientific interest, and at times the two become somewhat blurred. There are strong arguments on both sides of the debate about whether to continue
space
 travel, which we will discuss here. On the one hand, those who urge the continued exploration of
space
 say that
this
 field has given us substantial technical advances over the past fifty years, ranging from better plastics and 22alloys to a greater understanding of flight and gravity.
Furthermore
, they claim that
further
 investigations will help to solve some of mankind’s most pressing issues,
such
 as lack of food and environmental damage
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 because the study of (
for example
) biology and chemistry can be carried out more radically in
space
. Recent experiments on the International
Space
 Station in the field of genetics certainly seem to support
this
 view.
Conversely
,
however
, people who oppose more funding for
space
 research point to the extremely high costs involved, compared to the practical benefits which are gained for almost all members of the human race.
For example
, these opponents state that all the major developments in terms of medicine, genetics, materials and mechanics have actually been
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a result of terrestrial science and experiments, rather than stemming from
space
 exploration.
Moreover
, they feel that
space
 investigation is largely an academic pursuit, fascinating though it is, and that at a time of
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 our funding should be directed to more practical programmes to help people. It is indeed true that addressing some major human challenges
such
 as pollution control, protection of wildlife and greater political stability would not require any involvement at all by
space
 scientists.
Overall
, I feel that the opponents of high funding for
space
 have the stronger argument at present. It seems that the enormous sums involved could be used more practically to deal with some of our most immediate problems. After all,
space
 will always be there to explore, when funding and other problems make its research more affordable for us as a species.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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