Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?
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view including
prisoners in unpaid community work rather than lock them in prison is a good idea. It helps much to the society and Accept comma addition
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also
make them to realise
that there are many other ways in which one can make money to continue living.
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commites
a crime there are many reasons due to which he attempted to do that. One of the main cause may be need of money. When criminals are kept in perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commits
prison they
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prison, they
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the people in need may increase positive thoughts in one's mind and helps him to erase bad in him. an individual quantity of food or drink taken as part of a meal
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on the other hand
will also
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the state of being employed or having a job
employment
oppurtuniny
once he is out of a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
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indeed helps to decrease the crime.
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such
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instead
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also
gives the government man power
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manpower
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
