Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

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In my point of

view including

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view, including

prisoners in unpaid community work rather than lock them in prison is a good idea. It helps much to the society and

also

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make them

to realise

Suggestion

realise

that there are many other ways in which one can make money to continue living. When one

commites

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

commits

a crime there are many reasons due to which he attempted to do that. One of the main cause may be need of money. When criminals are kept in

prison they

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prison, they

are idle, their mind may be thinking "what need to be done once we step out of jail". If they are involved in some social works like cleaning the roads, taking care of public parks and properties, controlling traffic,

helpong

an individual quantity of food or drink taken as part of a meal

helping

the people in need may increase positive thoughts in one's mind and helps him to erase bad in him.

This

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on the other hand

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will

also

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create an

employnment

the state of being employed or having a job

employment

oppurtuniny

a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances

opportunity

once he is out of

prision which

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prison, which

prison which

indeed helps to decrease the crime. So

finally

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refers to the speaker or writer

conclude that by including criminals in

such

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sort of social works will be

good

Suggestion

better

instead

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prisoners

Suggestion

the prisoners

are kept behind bars.

This

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also

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gives the government

man power

the force of workers available

manpower

in case of emergencies.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

200 words

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