Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

In my point of
view including
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view, including
prisoners in unpaid community work rather than lock them in prison is a good idea. It helps much to the society and
also
make them
to realise
Suggestion
realise
that there are many other ways in which one can make money to continue living. When one
commites
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commits
a crime there are many reasons due to which he attempted to do that. One of the main cause may be need of money. When criminals are kept in
prison they
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prison, they
are idle, their mind may be thinking "what need to be done once we step out of jail". If they are involved in some social works like cleaning the roads, taking care of public parks and properties, controlling traffic,
helpong
an individual quantity of food or drink taken as part of a meal
helping
the people in need may increase positive thoughts in one's mind and helps him to erase bad in him.
This
on the other hand
will
also
create an
employnment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
oppurtuniny
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
once he is out of
prision which
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prison, which
prison which
indeed helps to decrease the crime. So
finally
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
conclude that by including criminals in
such
sort of social works will be
good
Suggestion
better
instead
of
prisoners
Suggestion
the prisoners
are kept behind bars.
This
also
gives the government
man power
the force of workers available
manpower
in case of emergencies.
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