Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers

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Gender equality has garnered a lot of interest in the past two decades. A few individuals believe that ladies should be provided with a fair chance to labour and succeed in their professions. In

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essay, I will discuss the reasons why it is not a good idea to provide equal chances for the women, as men. Even though there are limitations, gender

equitability

responsibility to someone or for some activity

accountability

can bring about a few positives in the modern world.

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, let’s say, it provides a platform for the weaker sex to strive and match with their male counterparts, which in turn would produce internal competition and

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leads to prosperity.

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, it provides equal opportunities for all the living beings, irrespective of their sex.

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, it assists in shaping the world to a better place by bringing a lot of girls out to the forefront.

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, there are many reasons why gender fairness could not be brought

out in every field

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out every field

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, because men and women are not created equal, their intellectual prowess as well as physical strength may vary drastically, which in turn could impact their ability to perform. Not only the male would be more pragmatic, but

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would be quicker in their decision making ability, naturally and

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are dominant. To exemplify, in the animal world, most of the species of mammals are male dominated.

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, women

does not have

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do not have

a natural affinity to outperform men in every field. To conclude, even though gender equality is a very broad term and cannot be generalized, there are lots of

limitation

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limitations

in providing equal share of opportunities for women.

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, the society can function very

well even

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well, even

without having

fair share

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a fair share

among its genders.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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