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Some students take one year off between finishing school, and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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gap
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year
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 is a
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 after high school when a
student
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 takes time to explore his or her interests, which usually entails some type of travelling or working. After the
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year
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 is over, the
student
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 begins his or her career. lt has both pros and cons, which I shall discuss in
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 essay. l, personally believe that the benefits of '
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 the drawbacks. There are many benefits of taking a
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 off.
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, the
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 can explore his interests before deciding on a major. Just passing out of secondary school, a
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 does know what his real interests are. A
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year
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 gives him time to introspect and he may
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 find something he has never considered studying before.
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, he can save money to finance his
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 and ease some burden off his parents' shoulders. Higher
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 is very expensive and some parents cannot afford the full cost of students' university fees.
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, during
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, the
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 meets different people and experiences different cultures. As a
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 his personality develops and he comes to know about the outside world.
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, a well-planned
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year
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 is attractive to some admissions tutors and to future employers.
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, a
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 can add his activities of the
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 his resume when he applies to the university, or for some job after completion of his
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.
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 is taken in a positive light by the admissions committee and some job providers. As every garden has weeds,
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 a
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year
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 has a downside. A
student
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 may find it difficult to get back to study. A
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 is a long time and once that tempo of attending classes and doing
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 etc. is lost, a
student
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 may not feel like studying again.
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, if he starts earning enough,
education
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 may seem unimportant.
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, if a
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 doesn't plan it properly, it may end up as a wasted
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.
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, a
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year
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 has a lot of advantages provided it is planned well.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Academic momentum
  • Practical experience
  • Financial pressures
  • Interim period
  • Soft skills
  • Maturity
  • Independence
  • Career exploration
  • Re-adjustment
  • Social setbacks
  • Informed decision-making
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