Some organisations belive that their employees should dress smartly . Others value quality of work above appearance . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that staff members should be well dressed while others resist it by saying that effectiveness of

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I agree with the former view

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I would discuss both views in

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there are deluge of arguments in favour of my stance

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The most preponderant one is that wearing a former dress and being good looking are

general requirement

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general requirements

a general requirement

in some

companies especially

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companies, especially

marketing sector

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the marketing sector

because it is believed that

apperance

outward or visible aspect of a person or thing

appearance

appearances

will have a big impact on the development of

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the organisation

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cannot

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can not

only contribute to attract the

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customers, but

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lead to numerous other benefits in various fields

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as personality development

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a wide range

the wide range

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offers

, masses can enhance the quality and productivity of their lives with much ease

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efficacy and

convience

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convenience

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all these merits stand one in a good stead

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as far as

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enlarge or increase

augmenting

their chances of prosperity and

excellance

the quality of excelling; possessing good qualities in high degree

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the

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aspect of the aforementioned propositions is that it is only likely to help one excel and thrive in varied areas

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dressing smartly is

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a symbol of being disciplined and it creates a

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environment in the

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the study results published by the government of Australia in April 2014 and May 2016

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clearly indicate

that the outlook is crucial and critical

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the overall development of a company

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many are in favour of

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perception

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a section of society

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be in contradiction with

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contradicted

the above said view point by saying that quality matters more than dressing

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a general conscious awareness

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as people are often judged by their knowledge and

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examplify

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jobs in IT fields main require vast knowledge about the field rather than focusing on their outfits

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it is apparent why few are

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I would like to state that both

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but if I consider both views

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dressing smartly is more effective and powerful

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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5 paragraphs

387 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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